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Wow. Whatever you were doing, you pulled it off very well. The characters were developed, and the writing clean and elegant. What do you need critiques for? haha. If there ...

[pre] Tonya scurried down the alley, her tail swished behind her. She was to meet her lover. The baby was coming. Kane and she would meet secretly every few weeks. ...

Okay, save myself from sounding trite, let me say one thing about Kyra and Jacob Zyter- They aren't full vampires. They're fledlings, which basically means that they're in the first ...

There were a few unimportant typo's, but other than that, not bad at all. My only concern is why you left the first few pages out. What did I miss ...

Thanks for reading it Gene, that's a compliment. Um, about what was missing, I kind of felt that while I was writing it, but I wasn't quite sure what it ...

It's a nice concept, and the writing isn't bad to go with it. I don't have any critiques that haven't already been touched on, so I can't be of much ...

Chapter One: My childhood was spent blowing the fragile white seeds of daffodils into the wind. Giving them my wishes, and setting them free. The stretch of green field, mixed ...

wow. This is such an old almost hurts to read. hehe. Anyways, for those of you interested, the vampire in me has decided that I need to write an actual ...

Ah, I'm back (or trying). I was gone for a while, because it's harder than you would think to take care of a newborn baby and continue writing. It's been ...

Most others pretty much hit the nail on the head with their critiques. It seemed awkward and confusing at parts. The writing itself was very well done, but the exceution ...

Okay, um...I haven't done a critique in a while, so let's see if it's anything like riding a bike. The Good: What I did like about this piece was that ...

Via- Yeah, that's her in my avatar. My neighber is one of my good friends, and she comes over a lot to take pictures, and then takes them home and ...

Clau- At this point her eyes are still dark blueish, but we're pretty sure they'll end up some form of brown by the time she's three. Although, I think she ...

Bella is 10 weeks tomorrow :)

I love how people are hating Twilight just on principle. Lol. I personally loved Twilight for the same reason I love most things; it was origional. I tell you, go ...