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Re: Nothing's Fair in Teen Love and War (chapter 2)
Seeing as last time I overwhelmed you with edits, I'll just go with a different kind of critique this time. :? Characters: Dylan: I guess this part is supposed to ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: The JC House
Lol. I don't think POD is what I want to publish first. I think it's almost too...heavy, for the audience I want. Though, when I get an audience, I will ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: The JC House
Hey, I'm JC, you may or may not know me, but that's irrelivant. A bit about me, just so you'll care enough to check up on my work every once ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Nightfall
They ran, lungs filled to bursting as they took in deep joyful breaths of the sweet-smelling air in the valley. Pushing themselves as hard as they could, sweat pouring off ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Corner in the Round Room pt1
Sorry kid, but you've got to change this to rated r. The F word, even used once calls for an R rating. I know, weird, but true. So you've got ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: My Love, My Greatest Terror
It seems kind-of poetic prose-y, but it's not poetry. MODS, please do not move this to poetry. My Love, My Greatest Terror To: Bella What began as a fear I ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: A Candle in the Darkness - Prologue (Edited)
I realize that you'll probably get a million other critiques, so I'll just answer your questions... Questions: 1. Is it too melodramatic? 2. Do my characters feel real? 3. Is ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [2]
3/10 I'm sure if I knew what it was it would be awesome. It gets three for being pretty.
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Title Feedback
Makes me think of Historical things, like wars and horses and sword battles. Not really my thing. Either that or something like father/son going to war, or something like that. ...
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: Nothing's Fair in Teen Love and War
One group of boys were seeing who could spit the farthest out of the window. Should be 'was'. If you don't believe me, read it out loud and see which ...
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: A Peice of A Love Story (untitled at the moment) ;)
A sutle voice just merely over a whisper led me down the hall of endless florescent lighting. Yet somehow she's still sitting? Don't be so abstract, it takes away more ...
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
3/10 =( What's wrong with drummers? I am one.
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: What does this username make you think of?
This really cool owl I got to take care of while volunteering at the Animal Guys. And don't worry, I have no idea who JC whats-his-name is. =D
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: What does this username make you think of?
An adverage girl in your everyday teen-lit book, you know, the kind everybody loves. JCobsesed (please don't say Jesus Christ)
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: Reverting-Part 1
Jaresh, you cannot lead yourself down this path. You realize you do nothing for yourself through these pranks, only cause more trouble for yourself," Thara's eyes saddened, and she broke ...
Apr 7, 2008