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I hurried after my friends as they made their way past the mailbox that stood perpendicular with the highway. This sounds like a run-on sentence to me. The mailbox standing ...

I don't think that writing is in ones temperment or characteristics, but in one's passion. For me, writing was always a passion. I've always been an embelliser, and yes, I'll ...

While I've been reviewing, I've seen a lot of mistakes, but none have ever rivaled the number of punctuation mistakes in dialogue. Do you not know when you use a ...

and the sea around me seemed to trap me I would suggest taking out the repetition of the word me in this sentence. Though that was the only flaw I ...

You barely showed to us her relationships to her friends. She er...doesn't have friends. Sorry. She knows people, but it's more of an aquaintence thing. But, I know what you ...

A teenage vampire girl who faces some conflicts which are school related lol. Anica isn't a vampire, fledgeling or otherwise. =D, but thank you for the critique, Fayth.

Any ideas how I could better make them seem beleivable? Instead of the mother knowing that her daughter has only ten minutes to live, and lets her die, how about ...

I'll post a synopsis as soon as I write one, choco ;) As for Evil Angel, I'm kind-of having second thoughts about it...it's definently not one of my stronger peices, ...

Choco- You're purple! Congrats! Anyways, I'm curious. You say that you like Anica, but not her narration. What don't you like about it? I'm having a hard time starting this ...

Hey! Everybody, thanks for reading chapter one! I'm just here to let you know that I just recently posted chapter two. It would be amazing if you critiqued it ;D ...

The nurses always put me back in the same position they found me in, after they finish their poking and prodding, and that's fine with me. It seems like this ...

Basically I’m your normal teenager. No, scratch that. I’m completely original. I have dark brown hair. Unlike my mother, who has the godly golden locks of curls that every girl ...

“Owe!” You spelled this wrong. It's usually, Ow. But you can also use 'ouch' if you'd like. =D Blood flowed into his mouth, human blood. Now, on this it's just ...

Chapter Two: Something woke me up. The room was dark, and everybody was still asleep, curled up on their beds. I looked around, thought about turning on a light, but ...

Lethero looked over the temporary camp his wolves made as the day descended into twilight. This sentence confused me. Well, not confused, but it was awkward, and that's not the ...