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The first thing I think of is A drum corp called Renegade, but depending on the cover art I would probably pick it up and see what it was about. ...

I loved this book in elementry school. My fifth grade teacher stole it from me :( But yeah, from what I remember it was really good. I should probably read ...

I read The Sight a few years ago, and it was pretty good. I've tried reading it a few times since, but it's really one of those books you can ...

Him and I sat criss crossed in front of each other. Can't think of a correction for 'Him and I' We. :D Aaron's making breakfast but Brad, Mia, Steven, Jessica, ...

Poor Meyer. Anyways, the Twilight saga was on the list of no-says for this forum, and I have no beef with it anyways. I've never been able to put down ...

I had some problems with the sexual content, not that it was there, but that it wasn't really all that accurate... All of those involved, except for Carly and Jessica ...

Carly stated half drunk. Add a comma after "half". We were at The Midnight Strike, a night club in Miami. Now, I know it's been done before, but would you ...

Oh, something I forgot. I didn't so much like the parts where you changed perspective. I think it would be better to reveal that through some sort of interaction between ...

So I had this lovely, long critique for this, and it got deleted by the stupidity of my computer, so here's the gist of it. Look over this once very ...

Again, I think this was a very good first draft. There were some nitpics, but they weren't distracting in quantity. Plot: You seem to be going somewhere, and that's good. ...

I trust the others to have already checked for all the nitpics, and I'll just go straight to the story itself. I think, and I mean no offense, but it ...

To me the ocean has always been a place where I could go and find some sort of peace. Whether it be from home or from school, it was a ...

You have a lot of the same issues I pointed out in the prologue. Something I'm noticing is that this is a very traumatic story, and seeing as it's true ...

From a purely plot and content point of view, this isn't the best way to start a story. I know, it's like a writer's cliche to start off with an ...

And I was still calling my own mother “Mommy”, had just shed the habit- an art, as I regarded it- of thumbsucking and finally trashed my crayons in favor of ...