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Could you please review my peice of work .

Could you please review my story .

Teal'C "Why the hell did you do that for" I screamed at Anna who was lounging near the airport water taps. A buzz echoed through the white walls of Auckland ...

Chapter 1: Anna E veryone likes the idea of being something different, of being something out of this world and having abilities not even the most intelligible man in the ...

Sky I sat there in my dorm fiddling with my bronze lighter, down one side of it the casing was see through so you can see how much gas (which ...

Woah it was short yet really good. I could visulaise the actions and the meaning inot it. I really liked it, I didn't find any grammar or spellign mistake so ...

This was really well done, great job. You spaced out everything added depth to each character and were straight forward with your words good job! :elephant:

Wow, and I don't like poetry that much so this is really good for me to be saying wow!!!!! I really liked it! It was deep and meaningful good work! ...

Kind of small yet still very good. And I like the name! Otherwise I think you have a lot of dialouge but still it wasn't to much because there was ...

Good job on this, I really liked it. :D I was interested from the beginning and still was interested at the end, great job! :lol:

A few grammar mistakes in this though otherwise really well done. I was hooked on everything you wrote and kept wishing for more when I had finished, excllent work on ...

I love fantasy stories!!!! This is really well written with good action and loads of adventure!!! I loved it great job, no problems with me so yeah great job! :elephant:

Wow...this is really good. The explanantion is especially good work on it!! I can't wait for the next one, I found no mistakes maybe a little in hte grammar but ...

Long and effective, this is really well written. You explained evreything well from the place and the characters good job. :elephant: I have no problems with this so yeah..good luck ...

Hahaha that's really good. Exciting and awesome I kept reading till it was finished..can't wait to see the other one. I found no grammar error or spelling mistakes (but that ...