Izzyeyore

This story is , and your grammar is now practically impeccable, which makes it all the more enjoyable! good job, and I hope to see more!

Haha thanks, I know! It's really hard to get good photos because of the drunk/high/generally rowdy people and smoke and stuff, so sorry about the clarity and wires in some ...

Please write more! Oh, and by the way, your grammar has improved by leaps and bounds since your first story, congratulations!

So when exactly are we starting this? Just wondering.. Oh, and thanks sylverdawn, we should probably PM each other or something to get our 'relationship' thingie straight,etc. :D

it was a good plot, but it could use a lot of grammar help, I'll post the crit when i have time! :D

Yeah, it was opened by someband named Hurt, then Seether, then Breaking Benjamin, then Three Days Grace

This is just a bit more of the story, I haven't really had time to write much, but here it is! Oh, and I switch from 1st person to 3rd ...

I really liked this one, too! The twist about Tom makes it more realistic, because, of course, to every love story there must be a jealous or spurned male, but ...

I loved this! my only issue is your use of "coarse" instead of "course" but, kudos to a great perspective switch!

You make it seem like they're teenagers in the beginning of the story. Thy then meet each other on the stone a year or so later, and then 10 years ...

Name: Issau Gender: Female Age: 16 Species: snow lynx and human Personality: she is lively and vivacious, always up for an interesting situation, and has a curiosity so strong that ...

My father was a merchant in the spice trade and he had warehouses filled with the potent packages . maybe get rid of the "he" and for the second bit ...

Hi, I have to say that this story is now on of my favorites on YWS, great job! (and could I be added to the PM list, please?)

Hm... thanks for the suggestion, but i think that that would make it sound like all three explanations were true, rather than pick your favorite. Is that me being crazy, ...

I like your use of "Her" for the mother (right?), although it implies that the character either hates or reveres the mom. Your story, however, doesn't confirm either. She seems ...