Izzyeyore

Wow..... This is amazing! If you could PM me when you post the next chapter, I would love you forever! :D seriously, though, this is definitely publishable stuff...

Aww no more? At least, I can't seem to find it.. hm.... I love it so far, though :D

the second oe is my favorite, although the nose on yours seems a bit strange.... I'm not sure what about it, but ....aghh i don't know anyways, if you fix ...

tee hee I'll make a rival girl so that sparks can fly! :D Name: Isaura Age: 29 Sex: Female Personality: Always smiling and laughing, tries to keep others' spirits up... ...

Oh, last thing-- [quote] Long icy string things[quote] that just stuck out at me like a sore thumb, maybe 'tendrils of wind' or something?

I liked this; from what I read at least. What does she mean, you think, 'from what i read' well, it's like this: Your story consisted of very intimidating and ...

Wow..... *hearty sniff* that was beautiful!

That was great, my only comment is your use of the apostrophe-s. Here are the little things I noticed: Even those two brute’s in the seat’s behind them never spoke. ...

At virtually the same second that Red jumped, the building decided that it had had enough. The walls heaved, the floors buckled, and all those on the rooftop (or in ...

Great! I can see this just a voice, without any instruments, maybe a guitar? I liked it a lot!

thanks so much for the comments! I'm trying to think of another idea for something like this, but nothing comes to mind :'( I won't force it though lol

Thanks a lot got the crits, etc! I'm not sure if I will continue this i'm working on my writers block, and plus I don't have the patience for more... ...

Oh. my. goodness! I LOVED THAT!!!!!!! more? :D (the bag is talking)

OOOO! I'm completely resisting the urge to steal that right now :D /,_/| /==_ ( ^ (Y_.) / / / ) (_________) ) ( / |._ _____ | | | ...

I really like it, just one mistake that annoys me, as it is a pet peeve.... Derek laughed at her and Chole balled up a napkin and through it at ...