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A bloodstained field Two armies stretching as far as the eye can see The two generals Love and hate Love riding a white bareback stallion And hate mounting a jet ...

ok,this is starting to annoy me. 1)So what if the topic is not original,if she wants to write about it let her.Why should she have to write about flying sheep ...

The anyhoo was meant to be like that.I was just trying to show Wilf's personality.

I think it's really good.You'd never know we were basically the same age and grew up together because I don't know what half of those words mean! I think that ...

I like the first and second stanzas a lot. They conjured up a lot of different images for me and had catchy rhythms. However, I felt slightly let down when ...

There are certain parts of this poem that I really do enjoy. For example, "scars don't erase", only 3 words but they hold a lot of meaning. The poem was ...

I don't really know what the tune that you intended for it sounds I can't really judge whether it would make a good song.However, it works well as a poem.

It didn't really flow very well for a the moment it sounds more like a story.A good story doesn't really look that good.It's all in a kind of big lump.(sorry ...

While I feel that maybe the overall presentation was rather too dramatic for my taste, I appreciate the use of the adjectives. It needs a little tweaking here and there ...

It was a bit plain for didnt really have any meaning.Thats just my opinion,maybe it was meant to be simple? However, it sounds good to hear and flows well.

I think the long names were a mistake. Make them shorter,so they don't take an hour to read. However the way that the sentences were constructed put even the simplest ...

Format???

I was bored. Really, really bored. I'd been so bored that I'd even tried to help out around the house. I'd cleaned the dishes, well, licked them, I'd mown the ...

Chapter 1 Agon stared across the dark plains of his fathers was early morning and the sun was just peering over the horizon. Farming definately wasn't a good living.Agon and ...

It's really good.Some of these stories are just boring and you just want to give up but I managed to finish this one.Despite its length.I dont know if it's just ...