IveGotMyWords

Yeah, I'll fix the tenses in the morning. The only tense change was supposed to be past in the prologue and present in everything else. Thank you :] And yeah, ...

I'm glad you made it past the prologue :P After this chapter I feel like my writing style starts to develop more. Right here I'm still kind of struggling... Chapter ...

Hey! So this is my first story, every few days I'm hoping to post a few more chapters as I type it up. Because this is my first story it's ...

I find the first verse as perfect as I could imagine it. None of the rhymes come across as forced (at least to me) as did in your other work. ...

I like it. It tells a story and there are some things that you describe really well. It's very bittersweet. But I feel like there are some forced rhymes... or ...