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Re: Eccentric Circles - Too Much of a Good Thing... (Mature)
WARNING: This novel contains drug references. Unedited. Quickly typed. There are some sentences which don't facilitate easy reading. Feel free to point them out, it will make things go faster ...
Jan 25, 2012 -
Re: To Be Stuck On You
Unedited. Enjoy? Critique it! To Be Stuck On You (We're Too Old) You spoke of foreign lands The time that you had spent In place of serene bliss Morning dew ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Detailed Account of My Asperger's (Part 1 of 3)
Hey thank you for the critique! Yeah I don't know. I have asperger's but I can think clearly. It's not really the same as autism spectrum, there are just some ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: Detailed Account of My Asperger's (Part 1 of 3)
This is a three part stream of consciousness about having Asperger's Syndrome. ___________________________________ PART 1: She laid there on the bed in front of me and stared at me, gazing ...
May 26, 2011 -
Re: My Eyes Are Open Wider Than Ever Before
Yeah, like I said I got that Leonard Cohenesque filled-with-despair-and-unwilling-to-do-anything-about-it-because-i'm-a-slave-to-love kind of thing going on (that was a long word). Thank you for your
May 12, 2011 -
Re: My Eyes Are Open Wider Than Ever Before
A short little thing I scribbled in my notebook today. I think my writing's really starting to be affected with Leonard Cohen's :P I can feel it now, my eyes ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: No One Can Replace
Yeah, I'm more of a lyrics person, I don't really do punctuation enough :P I can fix that up right now. I wasn't really thinking of it too much! Thank ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: Heaven Shunned
This is absolutely magnificent, in my opinion. I'm a big fan of the imagery you use. Definitely keep it up! Your word choice is definitely skillful. When the story was ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: No One Can Replace
While I try to find parallels in everyone I meet, The similarities of everything in my sight, You’re the one thing I’ve never found twice. You have the facial shape ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: Begining Dream
As others said, very powerful yet simple. As I skimmed through the other comments briefly, I do not know if anyone has said this yet: I really love this style ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: I've Tried To Write You Ten Thousand Times Before
Yeah, thanks LilyMoore! This was kind of just a quick outpouring of emotion and I sometimes fail to realize when I do that I don't explain who I am or ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: I've Tried To Write You Ten Thousand Times Before
I can tell you you're beautiful: your eyes, your smile The way your hair barely touches the back of your neck. But you'd never believe me from all the lies ...
Jun 10, 2010 -
Re: I Wish I Were A Boat Sailing Towards Your Sea
Thanks for the comments, Amy, Silented, and Kamas! Kamas: I understand the cliche of the poem, but when I write it's usually spur of the moment. I am currently having ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: Toujours
I enjoyed the poem, myself. :P First, in response to what other people said... the line "It was too early to be today" means, at least to me, that the ...
Dec 24, 2009 -
Re: I Wish I Were A Boat Sailing Towards Your Sea
I wish I were a boat sailing towards your glorious sea. You'd be waiting there with open arms to greet me. Oh, throw your arms around me! Open up your ...
Dec 17, 2009
