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This was a great read! Every time he felt the atmosphere in his small bedroom, he remembered the memories with Tom, even after a month had passed. Only thing (grammar ...

Hi! Great first chapter! I really liked reading all the action. Something I think you need to improve on is emotions. I want to get to know your characters more. ...

I'm not sure about others, but I would classify this under Science Fiction (based on all that I've read). Ok, first off, I'm wondering where these two characters are! You ...

Good start! Just a couple of things though... -Try to make it longer next time. This was really short. It's okay though, sometimes short can be good, its just that ...

This reminds me of a topic we were discussing in school the other day, how the world has a misconception on the word "beautiful". How you have to be skinny, ...

Great little story! You were good with the descriptions, I could picture it well in my head :] I have agree with Burma, however. A bit of a back story ...