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Of Pigments and Protons -- good to see the vamped-up version of that one. I remember enjoying the constituents, and it works as one thing. but yeah, one at a ...

Should I cut both stanzas entirely? Are there any keeper lines buried amongst the muck? Where is the meter awkward? I don't want to take up any of your precious ...

I like this poem too much. Do your worst, if so inclined. our familiar lady. Death walks New York suave oil in her hair stalks Madrid a new fast-talking noir ...

DISCLAIMER. Do not expect this poem to pool in the impossible cup of your hands. It should stream as sand turned to mercury unless, of course, my intentions run false ...

So long as the chapters aren't so short as to make little sense and rush the scenes, it might not matter that much. Some books have no chapters, some have ...

It's going to depend on the world, but stuff about the characters attitudes towards certain things can be very important. I was never one for character charts or questionaires, but ...

ah, boiling chips. You're making me miss chemistry. and I'm in blue, of course. Narrowly-spaced lines recall the caramel air of Organic Chem, thick as hormones heaving in a beaker. ...

^ going to agree. Punctuation is important in driving the flow of poetry, and having it make sense. You get more leeway than in prose, but a good guide is ...

^ journal writing and poetry are not the same thing. I think others would agree on this: poetry is an art. It is not bleeding on the page, as much ...

very cummings-esque - and in the phrasing, which is very nice. I enjoyed reading this a lot. it works as a small poem but the second half could be expanded ...

This is a neat poem. It has quite a few good points, and some parts you might want to play around with. Starting a war and ending it simultaneously, causing ...

Yeah, making up a last name at TW sign up is fairly standard. You can see what a responsible mod I am as well x_x. Just looking at the list ...

I think something can technically be called "emo" because it's about teenage heartbreak or suicide and still be a good poem. If that's in your definition of emo then of ...