Isabella

Today, as everyday, I lie down in the middle of the playground, listening to the myriad sounds of daily life that paint me a picture of a world I cannot ...

Oh... another thing. I think that adding that last line, in conjunction with the title, is a great way to clarify any doubts the reader might have had.

I found this plot very captivating. You make good use of contrasts in the characters' attitudes to indicate the different perceptions of one situation. Diego's diction, especially when he refers ...

I think you have a well-thought out structure, where the lines are divided to signal specific pauses, making these singled out thoughts much more impacting. I liked the imagery. I ...