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Re: Starry Night...
I thought that was written amazingly. You didn't give too much away to the reader. However, you kept the reader drawn in with you beautiful description. I gazed at the ...
Dec 16, 2011 -
Re: Then Came the Fall. Chapter 7
I walked slowly to school, headphones in full volume I was lost in a distant world, carried away by the beat of each track. Once I had arrived I meet ...
Dec 12, 2011 -
Re: Then Came the Fall. Chapter 6
As I awoke I felt the bright Saturday sunlight filter into my eyes. I slowly got out of bed and headed for the bathroom. I showered myself, as I thought ...
Nov 12, 2011 -
Re: In the Glass Part 5
WOW! I really enjoyed that, although at parts I found it hard to work out which person you were talking about so it might be an idea to put more ...
Nov 4, 2011 -
Re: God's gifts chapter 1
I really enjoyed this. I likeed the begining and how it progressed. Here are some nitpicks: quick and a police car to You need to add and extra 'o' to ...
Oct 3, 2011 -
Re: The Sharing In Power
Hi I think you need to add a little more than just a blurb to get people interested. You need to remove the second capital here: KIsha There shouldn't be ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: My biggest regret
I really enjoyed that it gave a beautiful insight into your life and it also gave me an understanding. It is such a shame that you forgot your routine but ...
Sep 27, 2011 -
Re: Don't get me started on...
Don’t get me started on role models. These days I am left questioning myself about what a role model actually is; a good example? Because that’s not what I see ...
Sep 26, 2011 -
Re: Rude Awakening
I think you are a brilliant writer; what you had was really interesting but, there was no story. I think you need to add a lot more detail and a ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: Then Came the Fall. Chapter 3.
Thank-you so much I really appreciate it. I found all your comments really helpful. :D
Sep 12, 2011 -
Re: Enchanted Chapter 1
If you get a chance got you check out my Literary Works please. I would really appreciate it. Xxx
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Enchanted Chapter 1
I really enjoyed the story; I thought it was very interesting and a great concept. I thought you decription was really good and I really liked when you decribed how ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Then Came the Fall. Chapter 5.
“Mama, Mama, Mama. Don’t go Mama, please. I need you. Don’t leave me here Mama. Mama.” I woke up, sweating and crying. The reoccurring nightmare haunted me not only in ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: The Witches Gem
I liked your idea, although I think you need to have a bit more action to your story because not much really happened in your first chapter. :) We are ...
Sep 3, 2011 -
Re: Understanding, all i wanted
I really enjoyed the song; it's really beautiful. I love the single lines dotted about it really mixes it up. You need to move the exclamation mark onto the same ...
Sep 3, 2011
