Insomnia

Thanks Meevs. :D Although, I don't think there'll be another part for a few weeks, at least. There's a competition I'm trying to work on stories for. I can enter ...

Thanks for the crits, Nutty and Sieg. :D And they will find Kristie, but you don't know if they'll make her suffer. That pigeon was an accident! :( And grats ...

Well, you asked me to crit this, so =O! This is really good. But I don't have anything to crit, that's the problem. I just find myself wondering if you ...

Hey again lol. There was nothing specific here wrong. You much have edited it well. But i think there were a few places where you should have used commas to ...

Hey Sieg. I thought I'd start again and comment as I went through, so here I am. ;) They could really go places.” Chuckled That doesn't need to be a ...

Okay, so I've redone some of this so it isn't confusing. I added the bit with the woman saying Emma's name so I wouldn't have to keep saying that woman... ...

Hey, The Box. Can we just call you Box or something lol? It could help. ;) Welcome to YWS. Hopefully you'll have a great time on here. :D Good luck ...

Hey Clau! I have to agree with Writer over there: if you were going for disturbing, unnerving, then you got it. There were only a few really minor things, most ...

Angie lay on her bed, crying, the same place she'd been for the last two days. Two days since Marty had vanished, and still no sign. She knew the worst ...

No, sword, you shouldn't lol. It's meant to be a morbid. I'm scary like that. ;) But could you tell me where you think her motives are muddled? :) I'll ...

Well, you've got me a bit confused with with re-writes but I'll get it straight eventually lol. Jamie threw here uneaten sandwich away and stepped back into the room, *her ...

Thank for that, Meevs. I'm glad you liked it. :D And no, it probably wouldn't make sense if you only read this part lol. My story parts don't really go ...

Cool! :D I'll look forward to reading the next bit then. I seen it on the recent posts bit and remembered it. That must mean it was pretty good. I ...

She had just started cooking when she heard steps in her driveway. She looked up from her cooking to see Angie coming through the door. She was panting hard, and ...

Thanks, I thought so. ;) I'll get the next part of this up by Friday, for anyone who cares lol. Unless some terrible thing prevents it. ;)