Insomnia

Thanks, guys. :) I've done most of the things you two suggested. I'll consider change the tense, but I'm not to sure on that. I got rid of the adjectives ...

Congratulations, guys. You all deserve it. :) (sorry, Cat)

Hey, Evi. :) My story was neglected. I can has review, please? :P It's my attempt at minimalism for Kylan's competition. That's why there's almost no description, adverbs, etc. It's ...

I hope that was fast enough for you, Lily. xD I am restless today, apparently. I have a craving to review. I never know what to critique unless I'm linked ...

Hey, Lily. You wanted the faster one, and so here it is. ;) It's an interesting piece, and I want to read more. I haven't gotten too much of an ...

There you go, Wic. I hope those helped. Anyone else? I'm on holiday now, and the reviews will be a lot faster. :)

Hey, Wic. I see that you've had quite a few in-depth reviews already, so I'm going to focus on characterisation and dialogue. In the beginning, your narrator almost comes across ...

*RSVPs* I'll try to be there, if I wake up. :)

Holy wow. That is incredible and why everyone loves you. You know, Grain, you could've just said "the entire active YWS memberbase" and it probably would've saved time. I'm not ...

Hi, Wic. Found your post in my Will Review for Food thread, so here I am. This is an interesting start to a novel, and I will review the next ...

*coughs* I know you mainly do poetry, but since you love me so much, would you do a really short piece for me? :P I was going for minimalism. Not ...

Pat!

Darren pours the water from the bottle to the mug and takes a sip. He swishes it around in his mouth and winces. “Yuck.” He walks to the sink. The ...

There you go, Lily. That's your critique done. Hope it helped. Sorry it took so long, but I've edited the thread to notify me when someone replies, so I should ...

Hey, Lily. Sorry it took me so long to get around to this. I see it only got a couple of critiques, though, so I hope you won't mind a ...