Insomnia

Well, this was good. It actually made me cringe a little when he pierced her lol. But i'm curoius about why Rob was sad. he got rid of his daughter, ...

The group quickly moved quickly through the streets, following Lye. She moved with obvious direction, intent on her destination. But lye soon stopped when she seen a male drow coming ...

Thanks for all the crits guys. By the sounds of it, I just need to work on Mary as a person, and her actions might make more sense. And I ...

Hey JC. I'm sure we've all missed POD while it's been gone. At least the wait is over lol. I didn't find any mistakes in this part. Your dialogue flowed ...

I know that if I found something like this in the bookstore, I would continue, even just to see where it could go from her. Right now, I don't quite ...

Seriously? O_O Another cliffhanger? You're killing me here. xD But this was good. I'm starting to imagine it like one of those soap opera tihngs where they always have the ...

Granted, but that's only because people in New York don't read so in reality, your book sold seven copies. I wish I had endless ammonts of inspiration

Hey JC. :D Nice work on this. It seemed quite intimate, with the connection you built with the reader. I didn't find anythign wrong, but I just have to comment ...

Hey again Meevs (I get the feeling I'll be saying that a lot over the next few weeks lol). And with that I was hoisted out of the car but ...

Aww. :( That's actually really sad. I was going to wait till tonight before I read more, but I couldn't resist lol. You conveyed your character's emotions really well. :) ...

Hey Sam. :) This was really good; you showed us the image well. Or maybe just people that are familiar with the ocean lol. I quite liked it, and I ...

Thanks for that WD. :D I'll fix some of it now. probably a bit too tired to do it all. xD Although, if you liked that, you might not like ...

Hey Fish. I agree with Myth and Sam. This was really fun. Didn't drag on like some thigns you can read. And I'm not just talking about stuff on here ...

Yeah. :) I seen whence getting through those reviews. It was actually kind of freaky lmao! But they both deserve it, so Grats, guys. :D

Mary awoke to the smell of fumes, the taste of smoke. She could hear the sirens in the distance, but couldn't focus on them. Her head pounded. She opened her ...