Insomnia

“Hey, baby,” the woman called as Ian entered the house. “Hey,” he said, moving into the lounge where she sat and shrugging his coat onto a chair. He pecked her ...

Day 1. 7:33pm. Jamie. "Thanks," Jamie said. "I'm getting it for my friend. Bernard says it can't be too hot." "Okay," Katalyn said and smiled at him. "Do you know ...

Fine. Anything in particular that you would like critted? xD

I'm sorry. It was begging me for a crit. :)

Hey, Luc. I know this an old piece, but it'd on the first page now, so it's fair game. ;) I stepped inside the suite. I shut the door Watch ...

Thanks for the crits, guys. Sorry, I lost my portfolio again. :lol: It looks like I've got a fair bit of editing to do now... Not just on this story. ...

Aww. -hugs- xD This was horrible to read, and not because it was badly written, or anything like that. It was horrible because this is happening to someone I feel ...

Hey, Charlie. :) I said I'd give you a crit, but there's no spelling or grammar errors here. They're usually what I focus on. :P It's an interesting start, and ...

Happy Birthday! :D And Snoink, was it the same thing you said last year? :P

Hey. :) How've you been? "Hey." she said. You need a comma after Hey, not a full stop. Eric gave a snort resembling laugh That sounds strange. Maybe "a snort ...

The darkness was absolute, blanketing everything that he knew and making it crueler. The creaking seemed to halt as he opened the door, and he breathed a sigh of relief. ...

Same here...

Day 1. 7:05pm. Jamie. Jamie and Dave hefted Anne between them, moving towards Costco, their safe haven. Their progress was excruciatingly slow. "Far out," Dan said. "She looks light." Dave ...

Hmm... I think we're just about to enter Costco. I could change my time tags around a bit, and see if we can get in just as you're going to ...

...Charming. Well, my character and Vernon's should be coming through the doors soon with Bubbles'. Are there any plans for what'll be happening any time soon? Just need to know, ...