Insomnia

I kick my way through the ruins, broken glass crunching under my feet. Clouds of dust billow and obscure my view, and I cough, as I've done so often in ...

I can only echo what everyone else said, really, in saying that you managed to pack a lot of emotion into quite a compact piece. Your descriptions are great, but ...

That's so implausible. We all know Dono would just brainwash you into taking it back. ;) Still great. :lol:

Day 1. 8:50 pm. Jamie. Turning away from him he let out a short sad sigh, "More than I should of." Jamie turned and looked around. Anne had since gone ...

So everything would just be there for anyone to see? What about the stories and things that're rated R? Of course, it's entirely impossible that I'm misunderstanding the whole thing. ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

Eleanor Rigby.

Hey. :) This is really good for your first submitted story, but it could be majorly improved on. In the waning days of that dreadfully sticky summer, Roger slithered about ...

Hey, Jab. Here's my late crit (again). ;) I looked up at my dad who was only a head taller than I. This needs a comma after "dad," as otherwise ...

^Known for being confused often. ;)

Day 1. 8:35p.m. Jamie. Jamie wandered away from Jo in the direction of the tents, wondering what was wrong with her. The same thing that’s wrong with everyone else, probably, ...

She looked back at him, and stared in turn. "And why do you have a tail?" "You know, I could ask why you're a goat. But have I? No, I ...

Mat looked into the distance and seen someone walking towards him. The word "FireArris" floated above their head. Mat frowned, and sped his pace. "Hey," he said. "Arris! Remember me?" ...

For being on the Sexy Council. xD

Hey, BroadwayGirl. I noticed that you're new-ish, so I thought I'd give you a critique. Sorry if I repeat some of what Ayra's said. I try not to read other ...