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Hey. :) I promised I'd give you a critique, so here I am. I'll try to be harsh. ;) I think if I had a knife, I could have sliced ...

Hi, Googly. I don't think we've met before. :) You've got something that has the potential to be a good piece here, but it seems a bit detached at the ...

Hey. You did a pretty good job with the descriptions in this. Sometimes you descend into telling instead of showing, but overall it's a good piece. Just a few things ...

Kester Kester followed Machavell and Kester into the cabin. He stared at the two men that were standing before them. One of them was unmoving. That's the man I saw ...

Hey. I just noticed you post the third part of this, so I thought I'd come back to the first part of it. ...You may have asked me to read ...

Hey. Welcome to YWS. :) Your story would be better if you fleshed it out some more. Add some descriptions, some dialogue. If you're still working on it, wait until ...

So, I've gotten the three of us to the cabin. Now, whoever is going next can continue it from there. Just tell me if you think I haven't written your ...

Kester Kester watched Videl scale the shelves in approval. Machavell's attention was fixed on her. Kester glanced at her and she flicked a gaze back towards them. His face betrayed ...

1) When did you join YWS? 21 March, 2007 2) Did you try out any other writing sites before you joined YWS? Nope. YWS was my first. xD 2.1) If ...

I can see why you wouldn't like it because of its poor storyline of human girl meets vampire boy. But that does appeal to the younger generation aka me. You ...

That is awesome. xD

Creating the characters, specifically their dialogue. I love the relationships and interactions between them. That's what makes writing so amazing and effortless for me. Exploring the bonds between pe

Hey, Luc. Just got around to reading this. It may be my first propr critique in months, even though it'll probably be very short. I didn't find too much to ...

Kester Labour Slave "Is there a reason you're standing over me?" boomed a voice. Kester and Videl jumped; Machavell just turned to look at Bob. Kester tried to disguise any ...

My internet's gone off, so I don't know when I'll be able to post again. I've just managed to get to another computer before we go away for the day. ...