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Name: Seymour Cromwell Age: 17 Gender: Male Type: Miester Rank: Student, 2 stars Partner: Eruka Thomas (Machine Gun, Sister Italy's character) Appearance: With soft black hair and very dark eyes, ...

Heyo! I have to agree with Pink here. Your prologue just took away from the story. It was one just large info dump that really didn't do anything for you. ...

I don't know much about Mexico's independence story, but from the details I have gathered from your piece have made me curious. There isn't much to review upon with this ...

I don't really know what to think. It was really short and I don't think I'm supposed to thing much at this moment, because surely it is going to continue. ...

Okay, there is a lot wrong with this punctuation and grammar wise. First off, to make it a lot easier on the eyes, I would recommend breaking that huge chunk ...

I'm only reviewing this for Review Day. Otherwise, it would not be so. I find your writing very stylish and well done. It flows very well, and your characterization is ...

Well wow. That was an effective introduction, and very thorough. As too your losing inspiration for writing, it happens to the best of us. I find that this site really ...

Welcome to YWS! This site is amazing if you stick to it. When I joined, I thought I was decent at writing but then bam, I have been getting so ...

I think I just kind of found love. Your writing and voice is superb. Everything flows beautifully and I do enjoy the idea of this being, or creator. That being ...

Sup yo. I have to agree with Stellz on this one. It is very cliched. It is only the first chapter so I believe you will be able to pull ...

I am so proud. Like seriously. This is so much better than the last two chapters. The improvement is madness. Like I am amazed. You have gotten so much better. ...

Heyo again. (: I still feel bad for grave digging. But its for victory!~ This chapter was a lot better than the last. You have been gaining improvement. I won't ...

Forgive me for grave digging, but its review day and you posted your novel in our Discussion, so might as well review all of them right? ;) Punctuation First thing ...

Sam He had let anger get the best of him again. His temper seemed to be quite the problem these days. But it wasn't his fault his brother was such ...