Incandescence

Sara, I am pleased with this output. Any clause involving the word "heart" can be dropped immediately--it just makes your work sophomoric. The line Jack and Snoink took issue with ...

awsomewritter123-- It would be even better if you hadn't copied it from another website. I am sorry that perhaps previous reviews have driven you to this, but plagiarizing is simply ...

awsomewritter123-- Pay better attention in your ESL classes: get a working vocabulary, read some things about poetry (I can think of at least five posted in the Writing Tips section), ...

Hi Meep, I'm a sagittarius, which explains why I'm suspicious of astrology.

Hi Shraz, Welcome to the YWS Poetry forum. The title sets a pretty significant hurdle in terms of challenging you to write something more than an illustration of fragile, floundering ...

Turnstiles-- I think you've come to the wrong place with this. It's a collection of rambling generalities and forced rhymes, and it has virtually nothing to offer the sentient reader. ...

niteowl-- There is some good news and some bad news. The good news is: I was not forced to slit my wrists while reading this. The bad news is: I ...

Tropicana, Issues with reviewers should usually be taken up through PMs, but I will respond here this once. I think I gave the piece the respect it deserved. At a ...

Fand-- Below is a possible revision for you to consider. how to begin a poem the subject no longer exists. fatalistic penchants, pretty gin-soaked boy, taste of snow and apples ...

pandoraswritings-- This may be fine for an assignment. It is usually advisable, however, to refrain from being preachy in poetry you wish others to read and seriously respond to. In ...

Hi awsomewritter123, The above is sufficient to trigger the gag reflex. This is really awful writing. Return to grade school and learn grammar and how to spell. As it were, ...

Peacefulgirl27-- Try writing poetry when not in a state of REM sleep. Really. It does nothing for you or your language. Junk this. Best, Brad

Wiggy, It's refreshing to see an attempt to write something with purpose. S3 could be posted on any teen-angst website, and it would be indistinguishable from all the other swill ...

Cameron-- I am glad you find this topic of interest and justify its pointlessness by your own curiosity; that does not mean everyone else is interested in it. If you ...

Ari-- As if Texans needed it. Best, Brad