Incandescence

Opening Credits "Yellow" -- Coldplay Waking Up "Dog Problems" -- The Format First Day of School "Petals" -- The Honorary Title Falling in Love "Fly" -- Nick Drake Breaking Up ...

I use(d) Limewire, because Kazaa was pitiful. Just my general thought on that, anyway. Napster doesn't ever work right, I agree. When I regretfully wasted my money on it, the ...

emotion_less-- This could have its moments, particularly at the end, but I get the feeling that it was posted in haste. When I encounter something like: "Razor blades and pills ...

Hi Fantasy of You-- Now, had you been writing, you wouldn't have fallen in that ditch and broken your leg. Or whatever it is that happened. =] Welcome to the ...

carelessaussie13-- I hope somebody really does appreciate this. I don't. "I", "I", "I": this is a poem to yourself. You're using up bandwidth, and I remind you YWS is not ...

lexy-- I had two reactions to this: one was to laugh maniacally and put it out of mind; the other was to wretch at the thought that you claim to ...

Welcome Krystal, This is surely a good site if your desire is writing. You will meet amazing people here with fresh (sometimes startlingly so) insights into how you can improve ...

Lama, Indeed, both your cunning of wit and brilliant riposte has cut us to the quick! Oh, untimely death... Seriously, if you've got a hardon for Fox News and its ...

Crysi, We obviously have a camaraderie of sorts between author, reviewer and dedicatee. As it were, dedication poems are naturally difficult to critique, but below I have attached a possible ...

Soldier boy jack-- If you knew this was bad, why would you post it? If YOU think something is bad, what makes you think WE care to read it? Unless ...

Soldier boy jack-- This reads like an excuse to get points. This may come as a shock to you, but you are posting in an on-line poetry workshop. The quality ...

Hi Soldier boy jack, Not much here to get excited about. "girl in the coffin"? Yuck. This reads like an attempt for pity. For me it was instantly forgettable. Best, ...

Chanson, This isn't working for me in its current form. The layout of the piece seems to beg for reading it as parallel streams - the "fixed" standard-angst poem and ...

Soldier boy jack, You've used the whole Sarenghetti and left a blob on the paper. You've neglected to proofread your work (os dead

Krystalstars, Please read the rules before posting in the forums. YWS does not generate critiques autonomously--critiques come from members who must take the time out of their lives to read ...