Incandescence

ibelieve_inme-- There is virtually nothing to distinguish the current bit of swill from the tidal wave of similar junk that's all over the internet. Sentences of clumsy and ordinary phrases ...

dancing_goth_cat: Dropping L1-L4 is the only solution for this in terms of revision. Best, Brad

Welcome, Alanna - By the standards of even inexperienced readers, this is junk. Sorry, but it's simply not "improvable" through editing. Both the concept and presentation are boorish. It really ...

Snoinkuddy-- Relevance? It's not that I think you've said something false--I'm just wondering how your response exactly addresses the issues in my first post. I assume you're trying to insinuate ...

Alanna-- The YWS does not yet possess the technology to autonomously produce critiques without a user to write them. Until such time, we would all appreciate if you would review ...

Snoink-- This is sort of an ongoing struggle. We're not an affirmation board. We are a writing board--nothing more, nothing less. We are, in a sense, all desperately trying to ...

*collapses* We did it! We finished the god-awful design project! *sleeps*

Samar-- Welcome to the YWS Poetry forums. The good news is: I commend your understanding of rhyme, where the Enter key is, and how to capitalize a letter. Combining these ...

Cameron-- While I see the religious theme, I still don't see how this has moved beyond the standard use of religion in poems critiquing/poking-fun-at society. I think the problem here ...

Snoink-- The words "positive" and "negative" are completely arbitrary, defined by the recipient of the critique. So therefore, writing about "positive" reviews vs. "negative" reviews is pointless, whi

Snoink-- Perhaps so, but I think you should address the points I make instead of my basis for making them. Best, brad

Snoink-- What would you suggest to rename it, since the best phraseology I can come up with is being "positive" versus being "negative"? It would probably help alleviate a lot ...

Poor Imp-- Where we differ is in what you consider "positive." I don't think "positive" or "negative" ought to have any bearing on a critique. People too often personalize criticism, ...

Cameron, The link between the medications and the ending is not working for me. L1 and L2 should be abandoned at all costs: the reference to religion is not sustained ...

Poor Imp-- This recent push to be positive is based on the assumption that balance means better. I simply can't agree; any response that responds to the work in question ...