Incandescence

Trident: You write about the magic of everyday life without believing in said magic. At the end of the day, I'm left wondering what you're trying to do with this. ...

pandoraswritings-- This is junk. The "alas, poor me--it's your fault" theme generates no conceivable interest that I can see. Fill out the proper EPA forms and throw this out. Best, ...

pandoraswritings-- What is this? Overmodified. Underconceived, clumsy narrative, for example: "I stop and smile, And think a while, At the things that can not be. Like a homeless man, You ...

Gabrielle-- This is very weak. You have four scenes where you encounter emotion and they aren't particularly interesting either in isolation or in combination. At the end, what's the reader ...

Backgroundbob: It would be nice to think belief works that simply, but I rather think it's not so; the mind's working out of what it considers true and false (and ...

All: I am firstly a dialectical materialist with an interest in theology: materialists are the only true believers. A Lacanian joke is in order to illustrate the nature of belief: ...

Cicero-- The problem is: this never escapes your navel. You go on and on about "me" as if anybody could possibly care. Writing about geography is a difficult task since ...

A minimal coordinate system of humanity: desire and ideology. Operative ideology impelled by desire to control; desire to control impelled by operative ideology. We watch—pay to watch—people hurt

kaolin-- You'll notice this is a writing website. Writing incorporates spelling, grammar and structure. This failed on all three acounts. Best, Brad

Trident: This is well-above the level of fiction posted here. I am afraid we are simply inadequate to give your piece the kind of treatment it deserves. A suggestion for ...

Hi _fallingstar_, I've read ECGs more interesting than this. I have no idea why you attempted to roll out your narrative in some sort of summary, but it doesn't appear ...

Trident-- I agree with rosethorn. I love the length; it kept my nausea to a minimum. As a poem, it left everything unturned--no revelations, no thoughtful inquiries. Best, Brad

politicaltinkerbell-- This is way over-the-top with its larger-than-life "diagonal universes" and "souls to sell." Trying to be profound rarely coincides with actually being profound. As for the rest

xanthan_gum-- An irrational act rendered in irrational prose. You've done much better than this little ditty. The poem says (I suppose metaphorically) that you have ceased to apply your hand ...

metritis-- Stop thrashing at the keyboard. The least you could do is manage a half-way coherent poem for us to respond to. That, or you should take up kayaking. Best, ...