Incandescence

Certainly Love: Good grief. Poetry once involved the careful and precise use of language to articulate an idea or emotion. re: "But what needed to be said has been said ...

Cathy, You have posted here over a time-frame, and while I have not detailed your YWS sojourn, I do know that you are consistently posting below the average level of ...

misspriss - You post here in full knowledge that your work will subjected to relatively harsh criticism. I have only two things to say: 1. At this level of attainment, ...

Kinsley-- niteowl has identified the only remnant from this train crash worth saving for later use. The rest of this will fit nicely in a trash bin. Best, Brad

Hi, Sweetness - This reads like an exercise. There is absolutely nothing here to captivate your audience. If the goal was to complete an assignment--you probably did well. However, if ...

dramagurly-- I, I, I, me, me, me. I get the distinct impression that you write for therapeutic reasons as both of your pieces "tell" us all about you, and the ...

drummerboyb-- Moved. From now on, please post your work in its respective section. Best, Brad

drummerboyb - Moved. Writing in a Fiction topic is the same as writing in Poetry forums. Click the appropriate forum, and start a new thread. Thanks, Brad

Chandni - Behold as we conquer this geometry: the abstract topology sustains and fools when detached from its source. The universe can only parallel that which is sacred. As our ...

Chandni - This is OK, but it needs additional work. At its heart, this is a series of statements that need to harmonize for the poem to be effective, and ...

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piepiemann22-- What you've posted here is junk. Throw it away. It isn't worth the effort to edit because there isn't anything here. You should couple it with actual poetry if ...

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Nate-- I have a Blackberry that I use to distract myself during boring lectures. Mobile YWS would be more than appreciated. Thanks, Brad

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