Incandescence

Cameron -- I can't help but feel you pulled this from an essay: the language is overwrought with purple descriptions ("Despotic power wielded") and overmodified to such a degree that ...

Jesise, This: "He dreamed about the stars at night, And how the world went round. All of his dreaming led to great discoveries." is enough to trigger the gag reflex ...

toadrules007- This is pretty standard beginner's work. The best advice I can give you is to stop writing poetry that automatically bores your reader. You can do this by avoiding ...

Hi, bubbles5, I don't see how the premise in S1 is resolved in any fashion by the end of the poem. In fact, that's an adequate summary of the rest ...

parker-c-penne: Parts of this, such as: "I feel you pulsating, in the wilderness. Lost in a frenetic dream, Falling into oblivion. " make absolutely no sense at all. I suspect ...

ShadowTwit, Is this an English class assignment? It reads like a homework project that is supposed to delve into poetry but fails on more than one account. It features include ...

3-Damentional, This is not your virtual diary. When you admit this "sucks" (that's an understatement), I wonder what compelled you to share it with us in the first place? The ...

Beautiful Angelic Goth - How nice, a proasaic tour of history. One of the problems of this piece (though not by a long shot the worst) is the nature of ...

Dude. Dragons. Seriously.

Removed.

Removed.

Grif -- This is sort of what irks me, here. The War on Terror is too broad--any military initiative that requires "decades" to complete is not a military operation but ...

order, I'm not sure what you're looking for here. There are Frechet derivatives and Fredholm operators, but these are concepts from functional analysis and are probably beyond the call of ...

Hi, shmegan bob's back - You might start by asking yourself, "What makes this character interesting in a way that might also be interesting to my readers?" Best, Brad

Snoink - re: I don't think so. This is not a matter of what I "feel" but because if we leave prematurely, we risk hurting Iraq even more. For example, ...