Incandescence

Dear poeticweakness4, No. This is not poetry. It is a tour of your navel at its most nauseating, and most of it amounts to: "X then Y, Y then Z..." ...

kitty, This is a less than original idea rendered in less than original prose with funky linebreaks and spacing. Did you even bother to read through this before posting it? ...

Phindin-- This is as poor as anything. Repeating "Lost. Lost blahblahblah" every so often didn't work. Repetition is used effectively in poetry when the it will be meaningful or somehow, ...

kazie-- This is pretty lame stuff. The short lines don't carry enough structural or narrative importance to merit their isolation (Let's not even get started on the topic of your ...

Fantasyartist-- This reads like a first-time poetry exercise with its uneven rhythm and lack of basic care in presentation (spacing, punctuation, grammar) for an audience. As a poem, it's a ...

kazie-- You are far over your head posting here if this is an example of your work. I'd suggest that you consider future posting at some other site like http://www.writing.com. ...

kazie-- This never makes its way out of your own head to a form where it's accessible to the reader. It's a diary entry that you are using to recall ...

Basics NAME: Erik Undulaker DATE OF BIRTH: 18 November, 21 VF, Meißen (Meissen), Germany NATIONALITY: German C-CHAT ADDRESS: 41-178-96 AGE: 31 HEIGHT: 1.8 metres WEIGHT: 77 kilograms HAIR COLOR: Brow

ColeFX-- If the YWS is not suitable to your needs, perhaps a site more like is. While it's always a shame for a writer to leave, it could also be ...

ColeFX-- There are four distinct and disjoint hypothetical/abstract scenes going on here. Why do you think a reader should care about any of them? This is a tour of your ...

Working on my profile now.

Colleen, This isn't working for me at all. The attempt to draw parallels between the loss of feline innocence and human loneliness falls flat and leaves the reader with nothing. ...

1. "All Apologies" -- Nirvana 2. "Distractions" -- Zero 7 3. "Lately (Parachutes)" -- Wondabraa 4. "Sleep Will Come" -- Bliss 5. "Fake It" -- Seether 6. "Mechanical" -- Diefenbach ...

That's the kind of encouraging endorsement I like to hear. =]

Amelia: Consider: find the derivative of f(x)^2. Then D{f(x)^2}=2f(x)D{f(x)}=2f(x)f'(x). Saying the implicit differentiation is an application of the chain rule is necessary but not sufficient for und