Incandescence

As a first time sonnet, it isn't a bad start. Good thing you made that note, otherwise I'd be laying into you. So, keep working at them. I personally don't ...

I might as well be reading Webster's dictionary...wait a minute! You stole this, didn't you! Didn't you!? I knew it...right here in the Oxford English Dictionary. You could at least ...

First draft summed this up nicely.

Simply an amazing book chronicling the ups and downs of man in today's society. I wouldn't suggest it to immature people, but that's your decision. Personally, it takes a mature ...

cyan

Meh. I wasn't thrilled with this piece to any reasonable extent. It falls into the class of mediocricity. "Solarflares" was an excellent demonstration of syntax and gave me an image, ...

Could this have been any worse? Your syntax was overused and should have been revised with more vivid words. Stop describing the way an event occurs and describe why it ...

This was very good for a play. My only criticism is the title of the play. It sounds so far-fetched that I almost didn't read it. Of course, you're not ...

I want to say it touched me, but I felt detatched from the whole thing. And yes, the ending should be strengthened for a more powerful clasp on your reader's ...

Personally, I fail to see what the debate is about. There are a couple of topics in the first post. Is this actually about the UN's "failure"? Or is this ...

ploy

I didn't like this as much as I did Cyber. It just lacked all forms of imagery whatsoever. Not good. I think this was also done in an interesting way, ...

Plat

This is cliche no matter what I'm about to say, but this touched me in a certain way. It seemed a bit darker and reached out to me, probably because ...

This is very immature. The topic is, well, badly presented. True, you did personify greed, which is a step, but this is not what I would consider mediocre. This is ...