Incandescence

Jack-- First, the poem itself: too ambitious in scope. Take the advice I'm giving myself these days--going to fail to execute it, but it's worth aiming for--don't try for something ...

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I'm sorry can't share janice's enthusiasm for this. To my ear it sounds like a garden-variety rant dressed up in faux poetic phrasing. Lines like "...Shouting abuse as I walk ...

Spectre's Hollow. Spectre's is possessive of the Hollow.

Couplets? No. Don't ever do a poem of couplets. Couplets should be witty and sharp and at the end of a poem - not run throughout. Anyway, 'Spectre's Hollow' as ...

Thank God.

Lose gothic settings and ancient vernacular. The Transcendentals drove that to death. The poem itself is too abstract, as well. Cemeteries and Ghosts and Souls and Eternities are all empty ...

Oh my god...the burns.... Second, Fourth and Sixth stanzas are excessively redundant in a bad way. Rhyming is a very old-school technique, which is why I don't promote it (though ...

Without the divine, you have to rely on one of two principles, only supplement "random conception and atom collidng" in for God: 1) The strong anthropomorphic principle (SAP). OR 2) ...

Nice imagery, but, like all of us, you need to take out excessive adjectives and look for redundancy (for instance, S1 has too many "mind" in it). I particularly enjoyed ...

You post essays, poems, and stories for review. On the other side of that, you review essays, poems, and stories to post your own. Reciprocity. There is also "The Lounge" ...

I hate bright lights because they make me feel inadequate. I hate seeing too much meaning in patterns, and too little purpose in those around me. I hate night time ...

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And since you are quite the clairvoyant individual, you know these reasons.

And your point is?