Incandescence

RedHill-- Apologies--I misspoke. I don't mean to imply only to men; I mean it's still legal for boys to have their foreskin removed. Once things enter the realm of illegality, ...

kittah-- No need for it, per se, but any of the Foreign Markets in the Scripts section would appreciate a quick glance. Cheers! Brad

Gal-- "I guess the larger question here is, Why do male genitals take precedence over female genitals consistently in western culture?" Because they're the ones that are mutilated in Western ...

10 isn't really my thing as a prose poem; in general I consider the stream of consciousness polluted and unsafe for general drinking purposes (see, for instance, "For the herring-impaired," ...

#11: Help for the herring-impaired... You heard me right, you’re glossy-scaled and finless, sailing up the nostril of a creek. I can help with this predicament. My hands have cast ...

betsyy, No. This is a tortured meandering on the way to a questionable point. There are all sorts of problems here, beginning with a first line that goes "thud" when ...

Damn! By far the best poem for at least a few pages--there's a lot to like here. The foundation of "life" versus prenatal bliss could be fine-tuned a bit; the ...

harrypotterbooklover101, ... what ? This dies at the title, and the fundamental conflict seems to be driven by...wait, what conflict? There's nothing that follows that is either unexpected or new. ...

babyboymilky, This is junk and substantially worse than the other effort I read of yours. It's a poorly conceived, ineptly executed stream of gibberish that resembles millions of other pieces ...

Twilight_girl101, I got to the end of S3 and almost passed out from sheer boredom. There's just not much to get excited about. The reader recognizes the situation but is ...

babyboymilky, This is awful. S1 starts off with the stereotypical rhymes of love/dove and the subsequent narrative is almost embarrassing to see - cliché follows cliché until the end is ...

Commando588, This is an undistinguished list of events that tries unsuccessfully to be profound at the close. A weak concept balanced by weak execution. Throw this away. Try something else. ...

OverEasy, You've taken fairly grey characters (I think we all know them--most of us have been them at one time or another) and presented them in grey circumstances very greyly. ...

JustMe., This is as bad as anything. Each stanza repeats the theme without developing it. The padding to preserve rhyme and meter seems forced in almost every instance. For future ...

Vampy_Girl15, --and? If you were hoping somebody would care how alone you are, this certainly didn't do anything to pique their interest. The speaker seems to be socially challenged (I ...