Incandescence

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Hi Jiggy, -The poem has good elements, apparently. -Others here have seen these good elements. I tend to go hard on morose, hopeless, blizzardedly ((okay, this is fun)) assertive-loser poems. ...

Hi Colier and welcome to YWS! This poem is problematic for me because you are a little too prosaic in your descriptions. Some instances in the piece, and especially the ...

I don't mean to offend, but this isn't an emotion. It's a hard fact of life that language fails to describe everything it creates...

A (fairly unique) style is very simply the hardest thing for a writer to obtain. It comes from stealing other writers' styles, writing a lot with them, and slowly letting ...

Dear Timmy, I'm sorry for being unresponsive and inconsiderate. I guess I can't use "growing up" as an excuse any more...but I know things will be better for you, so ...

Oh pshhh I dunno what you people are smoking but the Kangagroo is the f-ing shiznit.

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Sobbing is a word I've come to appreciate as a masculine event. There is a fundamental difference here: when a woman sobs, we see it as hysterical crying, throwing herself ...

Guys can't express emotions without destroying something. Everyone knows this.

Thank you all for the kinds words. The piece really isn't deserving of them. Rease, I refuse to tell you the meaning of my poem. A poem's meaning varies from ...

Hi again, Aenvgiel-- I'm not sure this poem is working. Somebody is sure to say that the poem is reportage, but that does not bother me. What the poet reports ...

Hi ZanyPlebian, I like the first strophe. My only quibble is that "free soul" is such a non-descriptive term, when compared to the rest of the piece. It doesn't really ...

Hi Ainvgiel, This is a confusing work, to say the least. The punctuation here breaks up the flow of the poem with little or no benefits in return. I cannot ...

Hi volleychik992, Welcome to YWS; I don't think I've met you yet, so I hope you enjoy it here. Now, on to your poem... I don't see the correlation between ...