Incandescence

Prosithon, You can do much better than this. Maybe a lack of perspective on the subject, and so an excess of focus and detail. Nothing seems real to me; rather, ...

Hi Tropicana, This poem strikes me in two lights. The first is that it was written -- like most poems are -- at the onset of personal, emotional breakdown. The ...

I'm strongest between the 'a' and the 't'. Seriously? I would say characterization and description. I know there a number of users who feel like all the characters in my ...

Greetings SlickJimmy, I hope you are finding the Young Writers Society a helpful and informative place. I am instantly put off by the leek speak in the title. The rest ...

Hi Cameron, Welcome to the forums! I'm sure you've found your way around by now, but if you have any questions, feel free to ask. As for the poem, I ...

>=O And where am I? Hmmm? Seriously, though, this was nicely constructed, and I especially liked Samantha. =]

Jiggity, A poem is told from whomever's perspective you want it to be told from. Don't let the gender of the writer determine the gender of the narrator. All the ...

Hi there Mesh, I see potential here. However, I am left wondering what it is you are desiring. You might "swoon" for the unknown "you" (or is it directed to ...

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P.S. Consider: "Vanes and Veins" to "Vanes versus Veins" or some similar switch.

Sara, This light looks good on you. Unfortunately, you're not in it, or else it's morning--I'm not sure which. This reminds me of the pursuits of a child who has ...

DreamDeep, As I believe you already know, I am working on my Master's in Applied Mathematics. I have a BSc in Mathematics, and I am working for my BSc in ...

Lama, Perhaps God is an impotent creator? I direct your attention to the properly Gnostic tradition that Catholicism denounced as heresy. Best, Brad

All, It is the decision that the family must make. Why there is such hooplah about why they should release it escapes me. It seems ironical to me that the ...

Lama, Perhaps you should re-read the Constitution before pontificating on the notion of "right" (versus, presumably, "privilege"). Best, Brad