Incandescence

Centering Poems Ever wonder why they do it? Back in the old days, when poems were typed up on the old Royal manual, one didn't see too many poems centered ...

Hi guys-- It seems I find myself repeating myself - a lot - both in the classroom and on the YWS. To help avoid that, at least here, I've collected ...

Gal-- Did you even read Bob's statement? It's the very differentials in power which cause the immense stability within the world (and yes, we are extremely stable: we aren't really ...

worgs, "that it relies on Catholicism doesn't change that (in fact I love the subject matter and where it could lead!)." I think that is your answer. Another draft of ...

Hi all, Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. This is, indeed, junk. worgs-- I have never heard of the writer having to motivate in fiction; that is, ...

Hi Guys, Thank you, for reading and responding. I very much appreciate your willingness to speculate. Jiggity, The one word lines are probably intrinsically irritating...but I think each forces a ...

Jack-- Very strong writing. However, "but rages in the off-key \ beating of two hearts." seemed to me to be itself off-key. Perhaps this is the point. Below is just ...

Hi Jester, Despite my usual objections to political poetry, you decently pulled this off. I could at least feel and read a real emotional attachment to the issue. While the ...

lexy, This is awful. The rhyme and meter is erratic and the overall effect is that of an unfocused rant that was tossed off in about twenty seconds of writing. ...

Cornelius, I will answer in the order of your response. (1) Your lines are sporadic; some are short and fast while others are long and drawn out. This might be ...

Jiggity, The only help for this is the trash can. What is it but four (incoherent) sentences that have awkward, unthoughtful linebreaks? There are no clever phrases, no startling images, ...

Jiggity-- In any critique left by a user, they do not assume that they should have any influence over what the author does. As a reviewer, one can only say ...

Jiggity, This is junk. The one-word lines are ridiculous. They indicate immediately that your work is beginner-level. What did you think was coherent, here? I am having difficulty both understanding ...

Cathy-- Good grief. Poetry involves more than the ability to hit the Enter key. The language here is old, the images familiar. In the future, it would be rewarding to ...

Hi walawala, Welcome to the Young Writers Society. First, posting something in the poetry forums does not make it poetry. This, for instance, is a good example of such a ...