Incandescence

Sara, Jack is correct insofar as the language rolls off the tongue. Unfortunately, the meaning and purpose of your poem roll off with it. I see a barely visible trace ...

Hi Shadow, This reads like a mental exercise to break writer's block, as constrasted with a well-constructed and engaging poem. You've been attentive to the discord, but the narrative, phrasing ...

Cameron, This is pedantic dross at its worst: we are all sinners, sure. That is nothing more than we already knew. What ground were you hoping to break, what path ...

Chandni, Some images here worth keeping, a line there worth saving, but overall, this has no impact on me. I would prescribe a metaphorical laminectomy and a new structure of ...

Welcome yoha_ahoy, I'm glad you've returned to us. This is mediocre to poor. It takes us nowhere interesting, leaves us with nothing worth salivating for. Unless the intent was to ...

ConorR-- This is a tour of amateur thoughts presented in jarring, meaningless form. Outside of my relief to reach the end, I found nothing of interest here. What is it ...

Hi green_river, It's always reassuring to see somebody can elaborate on a definition. They are not, however, poets, and this is not, in fact, a poem. Shrubs are not awakened, ...

jtksmile-- How touching. Did you feel like this would persuade me to your optimism? In that regard, you have failed miserably. Poetry is an art as much as an ar(gumen)t--don't ...

Hi guys, Thanks for all the kind words and votes of encouragement. Best, Snoinkuddy, It was an excellent sally of wit, if I ever saw one. Best, Brad

The debate in the scientific community (and yes, Sureal, there is a debate) is whether or not the contribution to warming made by humans is significant or not. You have ...

Peacefulgirl27-- You let out some flarf; I gasp, then barf. Trash this. Welcome to the YWS Poetry forums. Best, Brad

Sara, Your voice is what could really drive this poem. I like some of this for that reason, in parts. It suffers from being "navelish" in the sense that the ...

Swottielottie-- Two fundamental definitions: 1. Journal entry / Blog--Writing in which the writer tells the reader what emotions the writer is experiencing or what happens during some event. 2. Poem--

ConorR, Your ramblings will find a better home at a different website. I suggest Best, Brad

Swottielottie, Did you pull this from Grey's Anatomy (the text, obviously)? Besides lacking all elements of poetry, it is generally bad. Poetry is more than a collection of linebreaks. Try ...