In_the_Moonlight

I loved this, and definitely think you should continue it. It reminds be of the Mortal Instruments series, which I recommend. Anyway here we go: Don’t antagonize me Sebastian,” she ...

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This was good, but I felt like I missed something. Did she tell him about Will? I have to be honest and say this wasn't my favorite chapter, but maybe ...

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This was absolutely amazing. KJ, you have to just have to write more and soon. Ya left me with a cliff hanger and as much as you rock at ...

Welcome to YWS, Midnight, :D I loved the beginning of this piece, mainly because it seemed more medieval to me then most stories on here. Okay into my review....... Her ...

Hi Lucyy, I like Nina, she seems tougher, more fierce, then all the other vampire characters in different stories. But there isn't much of a plot here. I know it's ...

I haven't looked at this forum in awhile. Oh, and before when I said that it reminded me of Terrier I only meant her outfit. That's all. I've already told ...

Okay, maybe I was just a tad slow when reading this. we all have those days. Thank you Scarecrow. Anyway Dark Angel, I liked these chapters. Very nice detail. Except ...

she is only fifteen. Was she driving?

Hey tn, I liked how you started the second half of this, but I think you should've described more how she was feeling. Was she nervous, relaxed, or ready to ...

This was good, but I think you shouldn't stray to far away from the main theme. They were going to perform at the festival. I think it was nice that ...

I told you in school that I liked both of them, but now I see the difference. I love version 2! :D -Moony

Fascinating...this was a very interesting chapter. Um....the only wierd thing about your chapter is that it sounds a little like that movie I know who killed me . The girl ...

I didn't read the chapter, but the preface isn't really a preface. It's more of just an intro, but it doesn't really sound like a prologue either. Moreover I would ...

Very nice! The poem was excellent although I thought some of your lines were a little to long. The length of them sometimes took away from the rhythm. For example ...