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Re: From Daddy to Daughter
Hey you had the triple crown of poetry: A good rhyme scheme (and you followed it), good punctuation, and correct capitalization. And the poem itself was marvelous, it was amazing, ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: John
I've heard something like this before, I think my mom told me it after she read a reader's digest. But none-the-less there aren't may things like this on YWS, and ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: love sucks
Punctuation and capitalization. YOU NEED THEM IN A POEM, don't listen to the sterotypes. Your poem... too common, make it stand out. Do something exciting, there are soooo many love ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: "Keys in Broken Locks"
That was an awesome poem, like the entire thing was good. I loved how you worded it and just how it jumped off the screen, my favorite line was (It ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: The Concept of Fears
Well, it was funny, and entertaining well done in general, just I always see two big flaws on YWS: punctuation and capitalization. Just because it's a poem doesn't mean it ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Just the way I like it
This was... disturbing. I get what you were trying to do, but you don't paint a pretty picture. And your rhyming attempt failed. The first stanza was fine, but then ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Dance!
this poem was lighthearted, but it was also light on punctuation too. Just because it's a poem doesn't mean it doesn't have punctuation, or that the first letter of every ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: What would I do without you?
The idea behind the poem was great, but you tried to input a rhyme scheme and... well, failed. You're the one I always go to, when I need to cry. ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Brothers
Well, I read through it a few times, it was entertaining, but I didn't get it. You wording was fine and so was your punctuation, like I got the poem, ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Flying
Great poem, it flowed well, but if I can offer some advice to make it flow better: floating high up in the sky. so that I'm surrounded by the clouds. ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Never Leave Your Side
I absolutely adore this piece of art. It was well done, you used the ABAB thyme scheme and made the poem actually flow and have meaning, the triple crown of ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Everyone's Doing It...
Well, I wouldn't call it a bad poem, but it sounds more of a commentary than a poem. The idea behind it was nice, but it really wasn't made to ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: No Happy Ever After
You use a very common rhyme scheme and do it well, and overall the poem is well done, but THERE IS NO PUNCTUATION! Just because it's a poem doesn't mean ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: A dreame
YOU NEED PUNCTUATION!!!!! AND CAPITALIZATION!!!! Just because it's a poem, doesn't mean it doesn't need either of those. Sorry for the rant, now, the poem was all bad. It just ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Summer
It seems haikus do like you. The second line is iffy. If you was everything as such: ev-er-ry-thing. then the line will have seven syllables, but if you say it ...
Jun 7, 2011
