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Like a phantom ghost coming out at night, so pale, so frightning, so very white, watching you with it's hollow eyes, nothing lives there, nothing survives. Good job, I love ...

Everything has a weakness. If you have no weakness, if you are invincible, then you are nothing. And nothing can survive forever. Great job, I loved this part especially. In ...

I liked it, I wouldnt change a thing, it flowed perfectly and it was just overall good.

I loved it. My friend's mom died just and I dont really know how he feels, but I feel really bad, I cant imaging losing someone like that when she's ...

Great Shakespearian sonnet, it would be cool if you tried at Petrarchian one next. But GREAT job, the only thing I would change is 'durst' that word just doesnt sound ...

like a c h ameleon i change color instantly.. wasting my life for lusts makes the insanity.. This line could use a little revision, maybe make it more concise still ...

Great job! I liked the poem idea. And completely agree, life seems to go by so fast. Im only 15, but still life seems to be ticking away. Im going ...

I chuckled a little when I read this because I used to be horrible at sarcasm, I literally practiced sarcasm, just so I didnt seem like an idiot, so this ...

It took me a little to figure out how to read it so it had the right rhythm, but I really enjoyed it. My favorite part was: "Yet you had ...

Well, seeing as you already have 2 extremely long reviews for these poems already, Ill spare you from having to read another one. I pretty much agree with the first ...

Interesting.... all I can really say. I dont totally agree with the whole homosexuality thing, Im a staunch conservative, but this letter-thing was really heartfelt, seems like you spent a ...

Legen....... wait for it .......dary Good poem, I feel your pain, I used to sleepwalk, not that its as bad as insomnia or anything, but great poem. Keep Writing!

Well, you've gotten a lot of good advice on this poem already, most of which are extremely long reviews, but I'll just say this: Good poem, just fix the first ...

I agree with some of the other critiquers, break it up into descending lines instead of a group of run-on sentences.

I looked at the brick wall of jumbled words after I expected to read a bunch of stanzas, and couldnt read it. PLEASE space it out, my brain can't comprehend ...