Ignatius5453

[3rd edit] Up above my resting head, far from where I lay in bed. There is a ship that treads the dawn, and with the sunrise tiptoes on. It carries ...

Absolutely, positively, amazing. Somehow, I walk into peace... But why are my feelings the same? I felt these two lines, they dont make sense, yet they make so much sense. ...

Not a bad poem, just a little hard to read, I couldnt find any rhythm in it, and well... it was somewhat lacking in subject matter. Spice it up a ...

Awh this was so sad. I feel for those people that are abused, I wish I could do something, and this poem really brings out that feeling. Great wording, great ...

You've already gotten a lot input and a lot of good advice, so all I'm going to say is I liked it.

Great job! my favorite part was: My work is done The water runs To rinse me of my past To be reused For different hues The old ones cannot last ...

The lyrics were okay, for me to get a good idea of how this song is supposed to sound, you have to propose a beat, some music to go with ...

Very interesting title, and the poem was good too. I liked it, well because who likes wearing pants? Not me! Keep Writing!

Good job, I liked the description, it was like I was actually looking at it.

Well done, I can't find anything wrong, at all. I felt the emotion in it. Loved it! Keep Writing!

I liked how you wrote it. Jumping back and forth got a little getting used to, and I had to read it through again just to make sure I could ...

Hey Welcome to YWS! Im sort of new too!! But I'm really getting the hang of it, and I think I've finally figured it out, any questions, ask me.... or ...

No grammar errors, but you could use some punctuation. I liked the poem, because so many times there are people like that all around you, just asking to be noticed. ...

Great job, I felt the intensity and passion in the words, I thought it was legen..... wait for it..... dary. 8/10 Keep Writing!

When I first read about the food going up your nose, I got scared this poem was going to be off the wall, but all in all it wasnt bad, ...