Ieatworms

Portrait I was all mouth at first- A fleshy ring of anxious need- Insatiable. I hatched a belly to gorge And poked a hollow navel to remind that I am ...

I'm pretty ambivalent about this. You built tension extraordinarily well in the beginning, but lost it as your tone became more romantic. Actually, I felt kinda broadsided by the change. ...

Heehee. Moma would call it art if the flesh has a meaningful and modern purple stripe painted on it. But, really... I don't think intention defines art in any way. ...

I think a lot of bugs have crawled up a lot of asses and died. I feel sorry for them. Qi, I think you should write a poem about that. ...

Wow. I forgot about the "e" thing. I just wanted to know what the words were. Good job building momentum and making me care. Congrats.

I couldn't read much of this because the language was so forced.

Shading is fantastic. I'm jealous. The check structure is a little off, but the fingers are great. Yeah. I'm jealous.

This was the first fiction I read on this site because I loved the title, and I enjoyed it. I think you need to better establish the grade level of ...

I hope it's not true that you abandoned this poem but kept the feelings. If it is, I've found that starting a poem over with a different form or rhyme ...

My art professor once told me 'Art isn't beautiful. It's isn't pretty. It's a comment". I think that applies here. Qi- this poem honestly did not make me feel much ...

I wouldn't worry about the political content or timing of this. Tragedy, unfortunately, is timeless, and you captured it well. I loved the music box metaphor. I found the ding-dongs ...

I'm glad you hit submit. I enjoyed this. My complaint is the abundance of precise color terminology all grouped together. You use non-sequiturs very well.

I know how much you hate for people to get the wrong idea, so I'll draw attention to this: "i dont drink unless im drowning in my emotions" I'm assuming ...

You convey some very good ideas here, but they seem unpleasantly fragmented in their presentation. I love your word choices- moon pleated, moving and unmoving. I didn't find your statements ...

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