Ieatworms

Wow. I feel like I've been punched in the gut. Very powerful. You combine words in ways I never would have imagined. Your title is a real turn-off, though, If ...

Myopic Hindsight If the earth bucked, split, Swallowed me and chewed Home to jagged pieces, You would remember waves Sifting a castle back to sand. Wouldn’t you? If I screamed ...

You did a great job using a consistent and strong voice throughout this piece. You immersed yourself and the audience thoroughly in your story. However, I agree that while you ...

Hey there! Glad to have you (and not just 'cuz I'm a sucker for reviews). I hope you get comfortable enough here to get your creative juices flowing and posted. ...

You use details to paint your picture very well. I like how your voice remains innocent in tone ("I like"... "pink eyeshadow"...) but your situations are anything but. My favorite ...

I impressed you made such despicable comments sound so lovely. Words seem to be familiar tools for you; you use them perfectly. I would say, I want to smack you ...

Riddles to Forget Me By About to cry, you choke it. Ready to speak, you sip it. Wanting me, you suck it. I know your breath. Hungry, three fingers to ...

An interesting perspective. Good division of sound and lines. I'd work on clarity a bit. (But then, I'm lazy and don't liked o think too hard.)

You expressed yourself very well. This could stand a little editing for grammar and spelling, but you've set the framework for a very strong poem.

Back away from the thesaurus. Really, when a writer gets heavy-handed with mulitsyllabic words, it breaks the rhythm, looks over-wrought, and is uninviting. If you are aiming for a more ...

Please don't argue in my poem's thread. I got my hopes all up thinking 12 people actually responded. Pooey. I'm surprise that you guys jumped on the religion thing. This ...

I like the blends here: conversational yet lyric, sweet yet vulgar, brutally blunt yet ambiguous. The arrangement reminded me of the tangle of emotions involved in love- the emotions that ...

I'm always terrified to start writing on a blank page. I think I'll ruin it. I think what I have to say is probably better left unsaid and the potential ...

Perhaps when a lie is to avoid criticism, it is not for the best. But, there are other circumstances that lead to deceit.

As for the butts thing, I have a rule for that. If I ask before I leave (and therefore have a chance to change), or I ask before I buy ...