Ieatworms

Being stalked is really no fun. This guy was a compulsive lair. At first, most of his lies made perfect sense. Like, "My dad was in the military so we ...

Hey! Give yourself some credit. Add another six verses and you have a verifiable rap in the works.

Pretty wild. How can I make it fit on my screen all at once?

Oh yeah! I get to be the first to reply. I especially like the repetition of the first lines as the last. That lends a nice sense of completion without ...

Yeah, I know I wasn't supposed to read this one. Teehee. I hate the title. 1) You only get one first kiss. Sorry I don't have a word for "first ...

Should I take a cue from e e cummings and keep all "I" "she" and "girl" (the new chick) references in lower case (regardless of grammar) so that they better ...

“In With the Old” He looks at the girl Because she looks Nothing like Her. He holds the girl’s hand Because she doesn’t Feel the same. He believes the girl ...

Wow. Very strong. Good progression toward your point. I particularly like [quote]['sweetheart you're a badchick with all those hairflicks, those cheaptricks.'] [/quote]

To be honest, I couldn't read straight through to the ending. It didn't catch my attention. I think it would be better in third person. It annoys me when poets ...

Boy do I know that feeling. Good use of your anger. If I may make a suggestion: [quote] With the ego that shouldn't be there? [/quote] I'm sure you can ...

Cute. I really want to hand you my dog-earred anthologies of poetry so you can read the funny and profound out of meter and rhyme.

About the "cat-scrathed" v "snake skin" debate; WHY WRITE SOMETHING IF IT DOESN"T MAKE SENSE TO YOU? NEVER WRITE SOMETHING BECAUSE YOU THINK IT SOUNDS COOL. Poetry communicates. It shouldn't ...

I like that your poem addresses a certain but unkown person.... it gives you a good sense of direction. Try reading this outloud to yourself, though. You may find some ...

You have a avery clear voice and tone, as well as strong imagery. I would suggest rethinking the lines referencing the hallway. It dates you and the poem to school ...

Gee... I would have thought you'd be the resident... hunter. Silly me. Thanks for the welcome. Now leave those poor animals alone, you mean hunt-y-type person you.