Ieatworms

Read this one at open mike, but change the title. It's beautiful.

I can't help but imagine what tattoos and peircings will look like in twenty or thirty years. Sure, you have a cute little tummy now, but three pregnancies later and ...

When old men say, "If I was 25 years younger...." as if their age is the only thing standing between them and getting in my pants. Reading my own name ...

This was good, but I'm not sure if I am supposed to take it seriously or not. The title and changes in font highlight the ridiculousness of throwing frozen peas ...

The repetition and rhyming sequences were a bit too Suessical to me. However, you did leave me with questions dangling, and that is a good thing. Why can't you? Who ...

I felt immediately like I knew what you were talking about. "in this myopic sphere." That's a great way of capturing both the visual and emotional impact of being so ...

This was one of your more accessible poems. I liked it. One point of concern: "Her taste lingers like languid language leaves the reader speechless." I think a word or ...

In order of importance: Glasses Black bitch-boots Grey pleated skirt White, Grey-striped button-down shirt/Black pullover (fake layers are good for CA) Pink string bikini panties Black minimizer bra (

Mulling Over Wine: a Toast He is a cup of wine, brimming With Her honey, Her bitter droughts, Their molasses and vinegar. Can I taste it, or will He break? ...

Excellent! Nothing else to say.

Mostly, very good. A few of the ship allusions felt forced, but the overall running metaphor was very effective. My nit pick: "The ocean was my God of love my ...

I feel dumb.

I read it once, and hated it. Read it again, and started to understand it. Read it again, and liked it. I'd take out the exaggerated spacing. I was expecting ...

It is very rare for me to post this statement, but: I don't get it.

Very Elizabeth Barret Browning. :)