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  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Delusion

    This is interesting Jasmine. But I was a little confused about this wording. She was tired, her body still weak from Pennsylvania, her head aching from where it slammed against ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: dismantle the sun [1]

    I like this. It has a nice rhythm to it and it sorta reminded me of The Giver for some reason. One thing though, I couldn't really get a sense ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Lounge, The Re: The March Review Day Check-In Thread

    I am so happy. I'm not at the very top anymore. :D Hmmm, maybe I'll attempt to reach 100 reviews total today....

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Fallout

    I love this imagery. I'm glad you used proper punctuation in your poem, not many people do. I am confused as to what the poem is meant to be talking ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Balloon

    This is poetic. I like the format of the poem. I think it works for the poem. There were two things that I didn't understand though. I still get butterflies ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Favorites Hurt

    This was an interesting poem. One thing though. It's not one large sentence. Please, put periods at the end of your sentences. Poems are just like prose; they need punctuation ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The Hills Song

    It rhymes! This was a nice, short, poem. Now I am wondering what happened to the speaker. This 'cause now my knee kills. sounded a little odd to me though. ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Deserted

    I like the fact that you used proper punctuation in your poem. Not many people seem to be doing that...Good job. However, I do not like this part though. runs ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: My heart

    I like your imagery. It's a nice poem and gave me a warm feeling. One thing though. Please use proper punctuation in your sentences. Someone told me, once, that a ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Nightmares Prologue

    I like your imagery. This makes me want to read more, but at the same time I feel like this is a dream. This sentence sounded a little awkward to ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: An Ode to lost love.

    It's short. I like it. One thing though, even though it's a poem it's good to have proper punctuation. A poem is like prose, they both have sentences. I love ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Great Sufferings of Paul

    I liked this. So Paul is an alien...interesting. I love the image of his agent carrying him to the stage. :D This bothered me though. Just then the door is ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Story Eight- The Pain I

    I liked this in the beginning, but then I got confused. In the middle it took a sudden turn and became fantasy. There wasn't really a hint of fantasy in ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Avari- Polite Conversation

    This is very short. It's interesting enough to make me want to read more, but it seems unfinished. I'm not sure who these people are right now. I read your ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Principle's Death

    Wow, E this is.....I could see the entire story in my head. Only one thing seemed a little odd to me...Why would he have a Gun's and Ammo magazine after ...

    Mar 27, 2011


“Rise like Lions after slumber In unvanquishable number. Shake your chains to earth like dew Which in sleep had fallen on you— Ye are many—they are few.”
— Mary Shelly