Idraax

Not bad, I love the flow. Lonely hearts hiding behind false smiles Catch each other’s eyes, quickly shying away Walking towards you, feels like many miles Slowly slipping away; You ...

Hi, I'm new here and thought this would be a good idea to see what's out there. I'll review almost anything, except whole novels and things that fit under the ...

Silence. Deadly, paranoid silence. I like this scentence It screams across the moors and bashes itself against the moon. It screams and screams in bloodlustful agony, until you can feels ...

You first create a new project and follow the steps. Or if you already have a novel, click on edit novel and step 2(I think) will be the one where ...

Ok, I made some more changes. This scene also comes up again in the next chapter, just to let you know. Also, if I'm not allowed to do this, let ...

I like the flow of this. I don't get the "improbable love" part though. I think you can make this longer and explain why the love is improbable. Your poem ...

Author's Note This story in a non-linear format, so if you're get confused that's ok. It's my first time writing in such a format, so I don't know how it ...

I like your cliffhanger. I can really sympathize with your character. Although I am confused as to where she got the bloody rock from and what the whole scene with ...

Yeah, I made up the name. I've made up a lot of the names in the story, although I did use some words from Google Translator, such as Tiz Varos ...

It's good, but going from the first four lines to the next seemed (to me at least) that it didn't really flow very well. Also, in your 3rd stanza(each, I ...

This is a good start. However, your last two paragraphs sound a little repetive and I think you can combine them into one paragraph. Also, add some more background information. ...

First, I love the diferent dialouge colors, although the light pink and greenish yellow are hard to read. Second, " If you do battle with Lucifer and win" this part ...

I read the critique I got on the last chapter and thought I'd change my storyline a little to help make the first scene a bit clearer. I wrote most ...

Oh, ok. Maybe you can find some place for the last point in the story? It makes sense when you explained it.

This is great. I love your descriptions. Although, I found this line a little strange. "they can bear water, princesses, or Salem, Massachusetts." I like the way this rhymes, but ...