Icaruss

Observasion Número Uno: When you begin a piece this way, it either works or it doesn't. When it works, it usually just gets a chuckle out of the reader. I ...

Wrote it on the spot for a contest over at the Contest Section. That means I wrote it directly into the post. That doesn't mean I didn't re-read it, and ...

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This is hard for me to review this. Yeah, it is sweet. Of course it is sweet, but everybody can be sweet, right? And is it well written? It's not ...

It's a nice description and a fairly interesting take on alcohlism, but I must argue whether that first drink is really that special for anybody who drinks. I mean, considering ...

Writer's Blocks are frustrating, but you gotta come to terms with the fact that they happen sooner or later. I say keep writing. No matter how wrong it feels. Just ...

Hmm. It looks like a set-up for a sitcom. In my cynical world, she would've been raped and killed. Then her friends would've been killed. Maybe raped? I give it ...

I always like books and stories like that... If they're well made. I mean, how many books about teenage angst are made that do not feel the least bit geniune. ...

Wow. I was surprised by this. Seriously... Just, wow. I mean, I love how you give as a deep, vivid description of your life in such few verses, how you ...

Jesus Christ, man. You need to use commas. Punctiation. Something. I'm drunk right now, and most of your sentences make no sense when I first read them. "Hey Jenna had ...

I don't care. I'm pretty drunk right now, but that's not of relevance. Look: Whenever people write characters that are little kids, five years old, four years old, they always ...

Stop bumping this. This thread never dies. Doesn't need help, really. Just some guy who's not getting critiques on their latest post. Here you go! The Heart of Heavens

First of all: this is all over the place, and that's good. I like how you dance through insignificant events, descibing them abruptly, then switching to the next one. That's ...

There's one problem: This girl is describing what happened to the police, right? "The sky was jet black, and filled with twinkling stars"? "His deep blue eyes reflected the pearly-white ...

Best Story. Dude, seriously? Thanks a lot, guys! And congratulations to all.