Icaruss

This was really good. And I do mean that. Your story has this fantasy aspect to it, this horror story feel that you never state, it's just there. And that's ...

That's hilarious.

Oh, this was heartbreaking, in that turn-your-eyes-away-from-the-movie kind of way. It's sad and you know it won't have a happy ending, but you can't help but look. You write good, ...

Oh! Right! I did it for your contest, didn't I? I never really did thank you for that. It turned out pretty well, I guess, and if anything, it became ...

I've a rather large story in the Advanced Critique section called " The Edge of a Straight Razor ". But if you don't want to read that (it's like 14,000 ...

I liked Choices better.

The hell with italics. Just jump around from the present, to the past, to the future, and don't even put: "John remembered", just make it a new paragraph and the ...

Random Thought #96: This just may be the best opening line I've read in quite some time. You set the tone for the rest of the piece immediately. Your characters ...

Well, all of my poems were originally songs. As in, I read them with a melody and tried to make them sound good said out loud. You can review any ...

This is started out fine. No, not the little snip before the actual chapter, but the way the chapter begins. You narrate very well, using a few words to make ...

The wealthiest party in the poorest part of town, where old men masturbate to thoughts of wealthy suits and hybrid cars. And somewhere a woman's fallen down, she’s given up, ...

Oh, don't say that. Writing dialogue the way people talk is not only a good idea, but your obligation. There's nothing worse than reading a story where characters deliver speech ...

I don't want to seem like an idiot, or a cold-hearted prick but this just made me roll my eyes. The simile, sure, is original but that doesn't mean it's ...

Bah. This poems are always hard because they think they're clever. I'm not saying that as an insult or as if it's something bad, but they're all about holding out ...

You're moaning like you're really hurting, your tiny heart, you say, it's breaking, we both know that's a lie! You've conned your way into jobs, into relationships, and my thoughts, ...