Iamnotperfect

Hi, really good sense of descriptiotion. I liked the poem and the way the story evolved going from a low to a high very progressibly. However there is only one ...

Hi, I don't think that the problem is the fact that the poem is too short. This poem definitely lacks of content, what is it that you want your reader ...

I like the flow of the poem, good rhyming scheme and good use of imagery :)

Hi, no faults at all, I love the poem and the way it flows. The rhyming scheme is really good and the poem is not lacking of emotion either. I ...

Hi the poem is very well written and I like the way it flows, don't really have anything negative to say ... keep up the good work =)

Doing the right thing when you know you shouldn't? Tired, exhausted from work on the bus thinking of the day. I don't have the energy to do anything,anymore I fell ...

Hi thanks everyone for the reviews, I tried to make some little improvements on the rhyming hopefully the emotion is still there =)

It kills me to know that there is nothing I can do to this feeling I shall not subdue My heart is in pain and sorrow but the reason I ...

Haha I am sure your inner child didn't leave you yet ... back to the poem I really enjoyed it, I think it flows very well. To be honest reading ...

Dancing,music 50's songs, old people smiling, back to their years, what a sense of nostalgia. Ta-ta ta-ta-taaa Their posture, perfect alingment, genuine smile, chin up, simple jestures. I see a ...

Hi I had some little criticisms but they have already been said above. It was an enjoyable poem to read and I must say that I like the way you ...

Hi, thanks everyone for the reviews ... I will definitely put together your suggestions :)

Hi there, I enjoyed reading the story but what I don't understand is that at the end of it she refuses his love however during the course of the story ...

Hi I think short poems are as much acceptable as any other however your poem lacks of substance. I don't really like this part: My hair, my blood, my short ...

Hi I like this poem and I think you should live the way it is. It is real and that is what makes it good, sometimes people just write about ...