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Re: Possible Worlds
Am I who I am, this vision, this odour, these feelings, are they real? I look around vauguely trying to see through each one of us, What made them who ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: The Blues Man
Thank you for the comments. I do apologize for the structure of the poem but I wrote it as soon as I had the thought. I will have to definitely ...
Jul 7, 2011 -
Re: The Blues Man
Here is the Blues Man, sitting on the bench and scrutinizing the world, holding his guitar with pride, and pouring his soul into his music. Here is the Blues Man, ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Memories
Hello, I liked the poem. Your emotions ar nicely protrayed and I found it very sweet. I like this line: It's where I retreat, And where I explore, It's where ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Dancers
hello I liked this poem, nice description and use of words. I really like these stanzas: Did young lovers dance with frantic eyes ‘Till day turned dusk and the moon ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Math...mwahahahah
So is this poem about maths? That is not really what i caught from it. Anyway I enjoyed reading it, it made me laugh especially this line: Functions and problems, ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Shimmer
Hello, this is an interesting poem and I enjoyed reading it. I really like the first two stanzas: Really I'm just a ghost, cast in chains, in the rain. Not ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: Dance
Hello this is a nice poem and by reading it I can understand that dance must mean a lot to the person who is writing it, however there is some ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: I wish
Hello, thanks for the constructive comments. By "jump between their wings" I was referring to my parents because that is what most children associate their parents with; love and affection ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Under The Stars
Hi if I have to be honest I think the poem is ok, I say this because I read so many other kind of love poems and found it a ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I wish
Hi, I do apologize for the spelling mistakes, after all I wrote the poem in the moment as you can see but I really appreciate the comment; also when I ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: voiles and tulles
Hello, I really liked the first poem. I found it very interesting and I liked the use of language. I don't really have anything negative to say, it just captured ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I wish
I wish I could go back to when I was a child, to when I felt at ease with this world. I wish I could say I love you sincerely ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: The Old Piano
I actually liked this poem; yes it can be short and there might not be so many adjectives but sometimes a few sentences can say a lot and that is ...
Jun 24, 2011 -
Re: The Child's Death
Hello I think the poem is nice but I think you could improve the flow in some of the stanzas. For example: Like a mirror, Of the past, Skin so ...
Jun 24, 2011
