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The other reviewers all have good advice. I think the most obvious problem was how he was describing himself. How would he know what he looked like? You'll need to ...

That’s what I’d been thinking. When I was writing this, I worried because it sounded a little too dramatic. I kept writing it that way, though, because I was afraid ...

I wondered how quickly it would take for him to pass away. Maybe seventeen minutes… maybe forty-six days… maybe a hundred and twelve years… maybe he was already gone. He ...

Once again, your story is well written, and very interesting, but there are some mistakes. When you say "a black tee, black jeans, and black Converses", the story sounds slightly ...

You did well on this. It kept me interested, though there were a few problems with grammar and spelling. There are a few problems that you should be aware of. ...